plzzz comment on this poem

posted by mcrcellogirl on Nov 21, 2009 07:38am

You ask if I'm OK
I wish I could tell
That I'm Not Okay
It hurts so bad, I want to yell

This secret
Is killing me
Softly
This lock, has no key

Could I tell?
That I fell
Into this bottomless pit
Or would you throw a fit?

Comments

Submitted by CyanideCupcake on Sat, 11/21/2009 - 9:14am.

I love the bunny! it's so cute *picks it up and cuddles it...then runs away with it* heh heh it's just so cute i couldn't help it

Submitted by geewierd on Sat, 11/21/2009 - 8:58am.

well done

(\ /)
(x x)
(ll) (ll)

Submitted by CyanideCupcake on Sat, 11/21/2009 - 8:27am.

I like it alot, it's very good, good job. =3

Submitted by mcrcellogirl on Sat, 11/21/2009 - 7:55am.

thanku!
and it does show wat i used to feel, im better now, but ive really been tryin to show the pain i used to have

Submitted by KiM_xD on Sat, 11/21/2009 - 7:52am.

oh, well i still think its good,
it shows alot of emotion :)

Submitted by mcrcellogirl on Sat, 11/21/2009 - 7:51am.

thanku!
i have to admit...this isnt wat im feeling right now
i did feel this over the summer tho

Submitted by KiM_xD on Sat, 11/21/2009 - 7:47am.

I honestly think its good,
and it shows how you feel, :)