my crappy poem!

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my crappy poem!

posted by scgabby03 on Nov 3, 2009 12:39pm

my hell with out you

my darlings
my darlings
kiss me goodnite
because tommorow i come for you
to drag you to hell

this hell is like no other u've seen
this hell is my hel
this hell is not a dream

as u start to fade from this world you knew
i start to gain energy from you

this hell is like no other youve seen
this hell is me hell but withhout you as a... dream

as im out hear on the other side
i think of my hell without you

my hell without you would be torture

without youy by my side id rather burn

in saintins hell.

yea ik its preatty bad.

Comments

Submitted by lost on Tue, 11/03/2009 - 2:44pm.

love that picture and ur poem aint bad either

Submitted by raredemons_77 on Tue, 11/03/2009 - 1:15pm.

well just keep working try to use different words to explain your idea in the poem but it's not bad...but basicly poetry is freedom of expression ..

Submitted by mychemcait on Tue, 11/03/2009 - 12:51pm.

no it's not crappy! just keep writing and eventually you'll be great! :) I should post some of my poems on here.... they're not as good as this one lol I have no poetic skills....