my (sor far) three poems (i consider them songs) :) RE-POST (FOR MORE VIEWS)

my (sor far) three poems (i consider them songs) :) RE-POST (FOR MORE VIEWS)

here are three poems that i made, better described in the links

i would like to improve my work so i would really appreciate feedback
telling me stuff like your fav line, or least fave, or maybe even a rating etc thanks so much people (and super thanks to people who already read them)

here are my songs :D thanks for going to them

http://www.mychemicalromance.com/blog/johnschwarcz/my-i-dont-love-you-so...

http://www.mychemicalromance.com/blog/johnschwarcz/my-sleep-song

http://www.mychemicalromance.com/blog/johnschwarcz/my-dead-song-p

thanks again so much people

(ps: this is a link to a bunch of old freestyles i made http://www.mychemicalromance.com/blog/johnschwarcz/repost-some-freestyle... if you want to see how i put the old freestyles together to make the songs)

PPS: after reading the poems (which were all quickies btw :) ) do you think i should pursue my dream of being a alt rock singer (talent wise) :)